Comments on: Quickness http://www.afburns.com/2008/12/04/quickness/ Alexander Burns's writing sketchbook Mon, 26 Dec 2011 21:13:32 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Frank Byrns http://www.afburns.com/2008/12/04/quickness/comment-page-1/#comment-222 Frank Byrns Wed, 10 Dec 2008 05:17:00 +0000 http://afburns.wordpress.com/?p=253#comment-222 Make the paragraphs shorter, too - play with the rhythm of the story. Or each one a bit shorter than the previous one - building 'speed' into the story. Make the paragraphs shorter, too – play with the rhythm of the story.

Or each one a bit shorter than the previous one – building ‘speed’ into the story.

]]> By: Alexander Burns http://www.afburns.com/2008/12/04/quickness/comment-page-1/#comment-221 Alexander Burns Fri, 05 Dec 2008 20:37:08 +0000 http://afburns.wordpress.com/?p=253#comment-221 Thanks, guys! I'll keep that in mind, KC. Thanks, guys! I’ll keep that in mind, KC.

]]> By: Erin http://www.afburns.com/2008/12/04/quickness/comment-page-1/#comment-224 Erin Fri, 05 Dec 2008 15:56:31 +0000 http://afburns.wordpress.com/?p=253#comment-224 I'm interested so far. I’m interested so far.

]]> By: kcball http://www.afburns.com/2008/12/04/quickness/comment-page-1/#comment-223 kcball Fri, 05 Dec 2008 06:09:53 +0000 http://afburns.wordpress.com/?p=253#comment-223 I think this works, Alex. This is sort of stream of consciousness, so the notion that he has all the time in the world to think is not bad. If I were to offer any ideas, it would be to keep the sentences short, as if he were speaking in bursts. That might give you the effect you're looking for. I think this works, Alex. This is sort of stream of consciousness, so the notion that he has all the time in the world to think is not bad. If I were to offer any ideas, it would be to keep the sentences short, as if he were speaking in bursts. That might give you the effect you’re looking for.

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